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posted by [identity profile] ketchupblood.livejournal.com at 08:07pm on 17/10/2007
I like the plot twist of Fuji having slept with Tezuka two days before his wedding and I like what it meant to each of them. And this line:

There was a certain mature sensuality in the 22-year-old Fuji that unsettled Tezuka in a way that the 18-year-old Fuji never did.

♥! That line was really beautiful. In a way that completely describes how I'd imagine Fuji growing up. It's so much like Fuji to get sexier as he gets older. xP

The only itty problem I'm having is Fuji's new boyfriend. It's a pretty major plot twist and you already have a lot of those. I mean, as long as you can handle it and bring everything together at the end, it's great and it'll be amazing to read. My concern stems from the fact that I've never seen anyone managing to do that. At least, not when Fuji's the one in an abusive relationship and you're writing from Tezuka's POV. Just my ten cents, though. ^-^ As long as you can do it, I have no complaints.

Your boys are so cute in such a sad way. I only just realized how young they all still are, though. It kind of hit me like BAM! and I was like, o__O. Then I felt very slow and silly. xP
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posted by [identity profile] sarcasticcinder.livejournal.com at 01:08am on 18/10/2007
I have mentioned that I'm writing this whole thing by the seat of my pants and believe me the twists and turns of the plot are taking my breath away. Matsura didn't start out as an abusive boyfriend but by the time I was done fleshing out that scene, he kind of revealed his true character to me.

I think I have a way to resolve everything that will be feasible without being contrite, but I have to just work up to that point and hope my muses don't add another path in the labyrinth.

By the way, have I introduced you to my muses? Meet Abbott and Costello...explains a lot, eh?

♥! That line was really beautiful. In a way that completely describes how I'd imagine Fuji growing up. It's so much like Fuji to get sexier as he gets older. xP

And yes, even in my own head, do I see Fuji being the prime definition of a "walking orgasm" as he ages:)WOOT!!!
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posted by [identity profile] ketchupblood.livejournal.com at 01:12am on 18/10/2007
Oh. That's a much better definition of Fuji than what I'd thought of. -nodnod-

Hello Abbott, hello Costello. Pleased to meet you! I'm Ketchup~ My muses don't like me very much or very often, but when they do I'll introduce you to them. They haven't even told me their names!
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