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posted by [identity profile] sarcasticcinder.livejournal.com at 07:03pm on 17/10/2007
Wow! First of all thanks for reading and commenting, especially since I really love your fics:)

I appreciate the honesty of your critique and you have me thinking of going through and editing the point you brought up in regards to Fuji's anger. I understand completely what you're saying and, you're right; even in this fic where the characters are purposely written as OOC to emphasize the passage of years, Fuji's reaction is jarring.

I can honestly say that I was having hard time writing that scene because there was so much pertinent information that I wanted to reveal without it seeming contrived and I guess it back fired on me:)

Matsura...I was hesitant at first about putting Fuji in an abusive relationship based on the fact that there are so many fics out with that premise, and having Fuji fall into one accidentally just doesn't fit with what we know about the tensai.

Thanks again for both the kind words and the concrit. I only hope that I can live up to the expectations you have in regards to the rest of the story.

Cheers!

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posted by [identity profile] 7veilsphaedra.livejournal.com at 12:26am on 18/10/2007
You really are so gracious about this. Fuji's anger is really difficult to express. I tried to show some of it in my story and regret it. I have to go back and revise that section, except I'm not sure how. He isn't passive-aggressive. When someone hurts someone he loves, he defeats them by turning their own strategies against them, but in a controlled way. So, for example, Kirihara doesn't get a ball in his face, but knows that Fuji could spin one there if he so chose. It is quite ingenious.
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posted by [identity profile] sarcasticcinder.livejournal.com at 12:59am on 18/10/2007
I don't see it as me being gracious...I'm being smart:)

After all, from what I understand you write for a living and you have been in the PoT fandom longer than I have. I believe the best, and most respectful, thing I could do is take your suggestions, as both a career writer and a PoT fan, and put them to work for me:)

I believe that I can only improve as a writer myself if someone is willing to be honest with me and point out the flaws (minor and major) in my works. It would be detrimental to my learning anything if I took constructive criticism as a personal affront to my writing skills.

Thanks again:)
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posted by [identity profile] 7veilsphaedra.livejournal.com at 04:39pm on 18/10/2007
I make a living as a journalist and freelance essayist, not a fiction writer. So there's a difference. Most of the successful fiction writers I know cannot make a living wage at fiction; success is determined by the fact that they've been published, repeatedly. Each has to supplement that career with other jobs.

Adding an abuser into the equation cranks up the tension so much that the story can easily get derailed by implausibilities, 2-dimensional characterizations and clichéd plot devices. You will have to really think out how you want to tell this story, even if it's an old story, one that we've heard many times before, in order for it to sound fresh and wholly Fuji-Tezuka. Otherwise you will get "My character is paysted-on, YAY!"
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