I like the plot twist of Fuji having slept with Tezuka two days before his wedding and I like what it meant to each of them. And this line:
There was a certain mature sensuality in the 22-year-old Fuji that unsettled Tezuka in a way that the 18-year-old Fuji never did.
♥! That line was really beautiful. In a way that completely describes how I'd imagine Fuji growing up. It's so much like Fuji to get sexier as he gets older. xP
The only itty problem I'm having is Fuji's new boyfriend. It's a pretty major plot twist and you already have a lot of those. I mean, as long as you can handle it and bring everything together at the end, it's great and it'll be amazing to read. My concern stems from the fact that I've never seen anyone managing to do that. At least, not when Fuji's the one in an abusive relationship and you're writing from Tezuka's POV. Just my ten cents, though. ^-^ As long as you can do it, I have no complaints.
Your boys are so cute in such a sad way. I only just realized how young they all still are, though. It kind of hit me like BAM! and I was like, o__O. Then I felt very slow and silly. xP
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There was a certain mature sensuality in the 22-year-old Fuji that unsettled Tezuka in a way that the 18-year-old Fuji never did.
♥! That line was really beautiful. In a way that completely describes how I'd imagine Fuji growing up. It's so much like Fuji to get sexier as he gets older. xP
The only itty problem I'm having is Fuji's new boyfriend. It's a pretty major plot twist and you already have a lot of those. I mean, as long as you can handle it and bring everything together at the end, it's great and it'll be amazing to read. My concern stems from the fact that I've never seen anyone managing to do that. At least, not when Fuji's the one in an abusive relationship and you're writing from Tezuka's POV. Just my ten cents, though. ^-^ As long as you can do it, I have no complaints.
Your boys are so cute in such a sad way. I only just realized how young they all still are, though. It kind of hit me like BAM! and I was like, o__O. Then I felt very slow and silly. xP