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posted by [identity profile] ketchupblood.livejournal.com at 09:14pm on 14/08/2007
-falls over- You did NOT just end it there! I want to know what happens when they meet so badly now! -glare- That was evil, you know. You know it was. That being said...

It honestly was a very strange place to end. You're in the middle of a lot of flashbacks, and it doesn't seem like you're finished with them yet. A flashback about how Tezuka broke it off or at least a little paragraph explaining it probably would have made this chapter seem like it actually ended, instead of just kind of trailing off. Great way to make a cliff-hanger, though.

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